Butterfly Wings
Glistening in the sweet sunlight,
Flapping up and down maliciously
Bright streams of spirited colors flashing this way and that
North, South, East, West
Grace and beauty are blessed upon these
As they depart from one flower to the next
Its radiant design pulls it all together
Butterfly Wings
12 comments:
this is amazing!!!!!!!!!
thnx really? ru just saying that? wat could i work on?
oh and can you give me THE CALL. Im now obsesed with it. its SUCH a good song!! it went so perfectly witht he end of Narnia. I now want to read the series.
i'll try!!!!!!!!!!
I don't think you realize Noodle that you are a great writer. You just don't write like Maria, Gina, or Bela. They are so into emotions, that sometimes it can seem like we've read something similar of theirs before (no offense to bela, maria, or gina). You write, a little more not creative, but lightly. You have different imagery, and I love what you do. Everything you write has Oodles of Noodles.
lol thnx madster luv ya
luv ya 2!!!!!!!!!!!!
and it is true :p
It's definitely worth it to read the Narnia books, I've read them all at least seven times! But do NOT skip the first one, The Magician's Nephew, because that is basically the coolest one.
One question about this piece: why are the butterflies maliciously flapping? That would mean that they were going to harm something, maybe kill some flowers or something! Is that what you meant to say?
And Maddie, I don't think my writing is nearly as emotional as Bela's, whose writing chiefly captures the emotions of a situation. I think I tend to take a step back and observe rather than always being the one in the moment. Also, I think I write more funny stuff than Bela, who seems to reserve her silliness for real life.
that is true! I apologize gina, and to maria who would probably agree. I think when I said emotions, I really meant description. So my mistake! and sorry.
hahahahaha nice gina. no i don't think i ment to say that. i will change it when i get the chance.
This could work as a mirror poem if you wanted it to.
this would be an amazing mirror, really consider it.
hmmmm yeah it could work out as a mirror poem. i might have to change a few things here and there but yeah
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