You left before I had the time
to say the things that were on my mind
If you were ever to come back
I'd make sure to say them in a snap
Because you came and left me
In such a rush
I'd be afraid
That you would leave before I had the time
To say the things that were on my mind
5 comments:
this is good but rushed. if you stretch it out and just work on it, then it'll be great.
ok how should i strech it out?
where you use the word snap, i understand that your other word that snap rhymes with is hard to find a good rhyming word for for the tone of this poem, but then maybe u should change that first word, because snap doesn't sound right... if that makes sense......
ish
get it?!!!
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