The day you left I will always remember
I'll remember how akward it was between the two of us
The way you shuffled your feet and held your hands together
How you couldn't quite say what you wanted to say
How I never found out why you left me
I'll always wonder why
I also remember the way we used to be
Laughing at each others jokes
Asking non-important questions just to hear the others voice
Sitting, holding hands, and always staring into each others eyes
I'll rember the way you huged me
Whenever we had to part ways
Wishing that we could have more time together
I wish you hadn't left me
But I guess it was for the best
Maybe one day
Things could go back to
The way they used to be
8 comments:
I don't know if I should call this Leaving Me or The Way It used to be. help me decide!!!
I like the title leaving me. i also really like this poem. it's really good.
Um, hugged has two gs, and it's remember, not rember. Proofread or it's distracting!!! I liked the image of the guy shuffling his feet and clasping his hands together uncomfortably... and I also agree that it should be kept "Leaving Me", because that seems to be the central focus of the poem
i know i have spelling issues. my spelling is horrible especially when i type
hey noodle, besides the spelling issues, i think that is a great poem
uhh is that all you got? geeze
fine sorry, i love the way you wrote this. it's showing how awkward a break up is, but also reliving through the good times, the times you'll want to remember. it gives me like a mental picture of you two, with the help of the picture i saw of him, so it's like i can see a picture.
why thank you maddie that much better
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